it all fits into
one corner of my eye
movement is what captures your attention
i fly away (in crooked lines)
to dance amongst the pleiades
and their ancient choreography
of hide and seek
i am dust
always there
visibly invisible
one clear tear
containing more
than this river
of flight
i can’t ask you
to understand
my fluttering
i can’t stay still
long enough
to burnish sanity
opaque
my universe is trite and monumental
i name it tree
and you laugh
with the music
of lost moonlight
i am a sliver
beneath your skin
festering for freedom
you name me calliope
and refuse to remove me
this is the seed
of remembrance
growing petals
of forgotten
i am blind and you are hollow
each night i fold
a dozen paper birds
and at midnight i listen for your drum
.
.
.
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August 6th, 2013 at 8:28 am
may the drum be heard tonight.
August 6th, 2013 at 8:39 am
each night i fold
a dozen paper birds
and at midnight i listen for your drum….wow….this is just wonderful…so much only in the folding of the birds..
August 6th, 2013 at 9:10 am
this feels and moves across me love it
August 6th, 2013 at 9:30 am
I love this!
‘i can’t stay still
long enough
to burnish sanity
opaque’
so restless, so free, so transient – I don’t think this is blind at all, although maybe the other is a little hollow for refusing to remove me.
August 6th, 2013 at 9:32 am
you laugh with the music of lost moonlight? festering for freedom? are you kidding me? the gods reached down when you were born and touched you with the gift of poetry. no doubt about it. no doubt.
August 6th, 2013 at 10:06 am
one clear tear
containing more
than this river
of flight…nice…magical…like the i name it tree stanza….the folding of the paper birds…really cool layering in this…
smiles.
August 6th, 2013 at 3:13 pm
This is really beautiful!
August 6th, 2013 at 3:23 pm
What a lovely flight of fancy this piece was. Really a joy.>KB
August 6th, 2013 at 3:40 pm
Yes, I too love this poem. It has the textures, sensual keys, stanza originality, and volition to give it poetic legs, to move these wonderful words into a golden chamber within me, to be cherished like ancient coins, like piles of 4-leaf clovers.
August 6th, 2013 at 4:07 pm
Oh what a pleasure to read. Beautiful.
Anna :o]
August 6th, 2013 at 4:24 pm
“i am dust
always there
visibly invisible
one clear tear
containing more
than this river
of flight”
I loved every line of this poem but those lines particularly caught my eye. Very well done.
August 6th, 2013 at 5:28 pm
“I am blind and you are hollow”– lines like this have the single ring of a church bell– the kind you hear when you are doing other work, and you look up, to wonder if you heard it at all…such an ephemeral quality to this poem that sneaks around and settles in your skin. Lovely work ~peace, Jason
August 6th, 2013 at 5:33 pm
loved the paper birds near the end
August 6th, 2013 at 6:59 pm
Love all words & formatting, weaving down the page (I am taking notes, smiles) ~ Beautiful ~
August 6th, 2013 at 7:22 pm
Very soulful and beautiful work – as others have pointed out, the strongest lines really sing and resonate here – Ambitious, but carried off… Terrific! With Best Wishes Scott http://www.scotthastie.com
August 6th, 2013 at 8:22 pm
Wonderful, I love the ending 🙂
August 6th, 2013 at 8:27 pm
Oh, I really enjoyed the last three lines..may you hear the magic song at midnight.
August 6th, 2013 at 11:12 pm
beautiful juxtapositions
August 6th, 2013 at 11:32 pm
i can’t stay still
long enough
to burnish sanity
opaque
stands out for me. The structure truly adds to the impact which is a face punch with a velvet glove. a total sense of the authentic is necessary for a poem like this to work on me and I DO feel the sincerity, with ease I empathise with your ache, as it were: a pleasure.
August 7th, 2013 at 12:29 am
Such a beautiful piece…
i name it tree
and you laugh
with the music
of lost moonlight….this is just one of the many quotes I love
August 7th, 2013 at 2:14 am
Very cool place you take us to with your words Kelly!
August 7th, 2013 at 4:06 am
Incredible piece of writing that really engaged and involved me.
August 7th, 2013 at 9:50 am
beautiful poetry.
August 7th, 2013 at 11:05 am
I too love the layering, and your
writing comes from an endless
fountain of thought. wow.
August 7th, 2013 at 4:32 pm
Loved the light touches of your language. Glad i visited.
August 7th, 2013 at 5:42 pm
Beautiful flow of words. A poem I am definitely glad I read. Superb close!
August 7th, 2013 at 6:49 pm
There are so many beautiful images in this. It is such a smooth, soothing poem. Hope we all hear that drum.
August 7th, 2013 at 7:50 pm
So wonderful on so many levels.
August 7th, 2013 at 8:29 pm
First – I love that photo! Amazing! Second – I love this poem! Wow. Great write.
August 8th, 2013 at 3:44 am
I carry a hologram of the universe in a corner of my eye and can imagine the universe just so, with an eye gushing one tear … your poem is exquisite.