corrosion
by dawn the stars have been forced behind the curtain
all sparkling chitter chatter must be silenced
as the boss man takes his place in the sky
defeating darkness inch by inch and
rapping at windows to prove his prowess
i shield my eyes and make wishes on pennies
rise to stand here sipping tea and folding laundry
feeling small and perfectly ordinary creating
order from chaos one shirt at a time living
always in the circle of my mind that glows in
patterns as rich as sunshine and at night
i simply try to remember the light
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February 21st, 2012 at 9:22 am
i just love that first verse that helps me to smile as the shades come down to cool the eyes and still the heart.
February 21st, 2012 at 10:36 am
as a being to whom the light is everything. whose mood is arranged by the sun, whose spirit is defined by the sun and shadows of it, this writing is very profound.
i simply try to remember the light. i try always to remember the light of summer, as winter here is so long…
in fondest. Tilda
February 21st, 2012 at 11:24 am
Oh, that first stanza is exquisite!
February 21st, 2012 at 1:16 pm
i just LOVE that you combine the everyday like folding laundry with the really big happenings in nature…this is poetry i can feel on my fingertips…i like..
February 21st, 2012 at 3:10 pm
smiles…you bring more order to chaos than you know…smiles….and sunshine into lives through your words…very nicely done mm
February 21st, 2012 at 3:21 pm
i kind of live in the light….search for the light….yearn for the light….relax in the light…..breathe the light…..xoox
February 21st, 2012 at 3:41 pm
Great combination of the norm and the umm not so norm..haha…I wish those pennies would work too.
February 21st, 2012 at 4:35 pm
Your words are liquid smooth in this write! Yes…remember the light, so vital in so many ways! Thanks for lighting up OpenLinkNight!
February 21st, 2012 at 5:04 pm
I enjoyed you making order out of chaos through the ordinary, everyday things of life, and the rhyme at the end between ‘night’ and ‘light’ seems to fold the entire piece together. Beautiful!
February 21st, 2012 at 6:00 pm
Oh I love the first stanza–just an excellent write!
February 21st, 2012 at 6:05 pm
O K , I ‘ve asked before, and I’ll ask again, Where is the BOOK, please, pretty please :)this is beautiful
February 21st, 2012 at 6:56 pm
Really enjoyed this piece, you capture so well in a few words the daily mundane with the magnificent. Love it!
February 21st, 2012 at 7:00 pm
This poem is elegant in its simplicity. In simple tasks, we create our own order out of chaos. Minds prioritizing with each completion. Well done.
February 21st, 2012 at 7:26 pm
oh my my my my my! “. . . one shirt at a time.” you are amazing.
February 21st, 2012 at 8:50 pm
Love the beauty and simplicity here. Especially loved this line: creating
order from chaos one shirt at a time
Wish I could slow down and do that. 🙂
February 21st, 2012 at 9:37 pm
Every line of this was perfect – order from chaos one folded shirt at a time. Bril, just bril!
February 22nd, 2012 at 8:13 am
Lovely how you capture the ordinary with the divine…folding laundry…nicely done!
February 22nd, 2012 at 8:49 am
Your writing always blows me away.
February 22nd, 2012 at 3:42 pm
I’m with Nara. Creating order from chaos one line at a time – what an exquisite image.
February 22nd, 2012 at 4:02 pm
This was breathtakingly beautiful! I think I should print this out and pin it up by my cups… so in the morning I can be reminded of the moments that lay ahead of me.
beautiful!
~L
February 22nd, 2012 at 5:18 pm
The sun IS the boss, making us get to work on the laundry, etc.
I just love this line:
“rapping at windows to prove his prowess”
“remember the light” … yes, the best way to make it to and through another day of mediocrity, smallness, and disorder
Beautiful piece.
February 25th, 2012 at 10:25 am
Fantastic piece of work! The portrayal of life..another day…I really enjoyed this 🙂
Fabulous!
Poppy