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27 Responses to “on shedding my skin”

• Debi Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 8:12 am

  truth. those tunnels of comprehension can be long and too dark, but they always open to daylight.

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• Daryl Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 9:35 am

  sometimes it rattles around as if looking for that opening but not ready to see the light

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• laurie kolp Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 3:34 pm

  Such a lovely metaphor. Sometimes reaching the other side can seem so long. I really like your positive ending.

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• wolfsrosebud Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 3:39 pm

  and very slimy but part of life

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• brian Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 3:40 pm

  oo i like how you have the skin in your title but dont in the poem, it is an addition that plays well…coming out the other side found is a great line as well..

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• Kellie Elmore Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 3:56 pm

  lovely and provocative. like it!

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• Claudia Schönfeld Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 3:58 pm

  the tunnels of comprehension is a great image…also the snake..really an interesting definition of loss..there is some food for thoughts in this..

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• Uneven Stephen Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 4:00 pm

  Beautiful. I love the form, and the succinct lines.

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• Susan Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 4:17 pm

  beautiful

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• Daydreamertoo Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 4:25 pm

  Takes a while to shake off the skin before we can reveal the new growth too.

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• ayala Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 4:53 pm

  Coming out of the other side…great line…lovely!

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• Pat Hatt Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 4:57 pm

  Yeah sometimes that skin just does not want to shed for a while, wonderful verse.

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• Poetical Psyche Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 6:25 pm

  I completely agree, you’ve done a great job in illustrating a very novel metaphor for loss. Really like how you did this. thanks

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• Window lad Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 7:05 pm

  ..great wisdom – a substantial bread for a blessed morning here. Carpe diem!

  ~Kelvin

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• Yousei Hime Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 7:38 pm

  Love the sparsity of words paired with a single image, one that evokes strong emotion. Well done.

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• Kate Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 8:00 pm

  How do you do that? To describe a word perfectly and so poetically? It’s a gift.

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• Shashi Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 9:41 pm

  I was reading J Krishnamurti.. an Indian philosopher… who says we loose the reality by giving or calling it a name…

  Loss unlike the word is much more.. as you said in your words…

  “slithering
  through tunnels
  of comprehension”

  thanks for sharing…

  Shashi
  ॐ नमः शिवाय
  Om Namah Shivaya
  http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-tears-in-rain.html

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• henry clemmons Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 10:05 pm

  I wish we could shed our skin of of loss at times, but I’d hate to forget, if that makes sense. Very nice poem. I luved it, concept, presentation and soul.

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• Charles - Chazzy Says:
  November 8th, 2011 at 11:39 pm

  You do an excellent of sustaining the metaphor here and the tension of holding to it pays off with the lovely half-recognized conclusion.

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• Mama Zen Says:
  November 9th, 2011 at 11:11 am

  Chilling write. I love “through tunnels of comprehension.”

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• Seek the Sun Says:
  November 9th, 2011 at 11:35 am

  I love how you get from “loss” to “found”. Nice!

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• Charles Elliott/Beautyseer Says:
  November 9th, 2011 at 2:06 pm

  Nicely said. Some things much be shaken off if we are to grow. Those things are lost, perhaps, but our becoming is found…

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• Erin @ Wild Whispers Says:
  November 9th, 2011 at 2:26 pm

  Beautiful

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• Jannie Funster Says:
  November 9th, 2011 at 3:19 pm

  It’s those tunnels I fear. Yet they seem to be the only way through the grief.

  Another wonderful write, of course.

  xoxo

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• The Orange Tree Says:
  November 9th, 2011 at 9:05 pm

  loss is a word

  that lives like a snake

  haunting imagery,

  love your words, very electrical and touching.

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• Bajanpoet Says:
  November 10th, 2011 at 9:18 am

  I have read this over several times… I love the tunnels of comprehension… it’s a great image… I love this; it’s making me think 🙂

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• Joe Hesch Says:
  November 11th, 2011 at 3:48 pm

  So much said in so few words. I so admire your work here! The concept works wonderfully.

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