circles
we think we can change
who we are
alter the course
of our own
blank history
rise above
the track
we are on
split hairs
and
make deals
walk through
the end
to new
beginnings
with each step
we start again
but this
circumference
without corners
holds us in
keeps us out
fingertips
always falling
short
of center
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September 13th, 2011 at 10:53 am
And yes – no matter where we go..there we are. Round and round in circles! Beautiful post!!!
September 13th, 2011 at 12:22 pm
Lovely ..
September 13th, 2011 at 12:57 pm
god. we do. we think all this. but you are right, we just start again. it is, as st. exupery said, what saves us – to take a step. it is always the same step, he says, but we must take it. we so want to believe we have control, that there is a magical place to save us, if only we can get there, but my god, we are always there in that place.
you are making me think today, inspiring me. i love it when you do that.
September 13th, 2011 at 1:11 pm
Intriguing write. I really like these lines:
circumference
without corners
holds us in
keeps us out
fingertips
always falling
short
of center
September 13th, 2011 at 3:11 pm
One should stay true to their self or just get stuck on some merry go round, nice!
September 13th, 2011 at 3:15 pm
round and round we go…again and again we start but do we stick with it…i do have hope we can really change but this is certainly a spot on perspective…
September 13th, 2011 at 3:24 pm
Absolute truth.
September 13th, 2011 at 3:30 pm
I was so excited to see your name on the list and you certiainly didn’t disappoint…. What a pleasure to read your poem….. “to new brginnings, with each step we start again….” Every day is a new chance to change ourselves into what we want to be, how true….. Thank you Mrs. Mediocrity….
September 13th, 2011 at 3:33 pm
A thinking poem… no end, no sharp edges, no escape?
September 13th, 2011 at 3:55 pm
Wow, this is great. I love the flow and structure of the poem from start to finish, and of course the thought-provoking subject matter.
September 13th, 2011 at 4:04 pm
Rise above the track….good write. We can’t change anything…only the choices we make.
September 13th, 2011 at 4:29 pm
Full Circle is what we used to call it. Choices.
Well Put.
September 13th, 2011 at 4:40 pm
def. provokes deep thought… very straight to the point without losing complexity. very nice!
September 13th, 2011 at 4:50 pm
The circle of life. Starts where it ends, I guess it’s what we do as we travel its course that matters.
Lovely prose.
September 13th, 2011 at 6:13 pm
Intriguing read. I would suggest we should be trying to make the most of who we are, not attempting to become someone else.
There is a lot of poetic talent displayed here. Why is it not enough to become the most wonderful poet you can be? Who wants to be a king or a rockstar, anyway?
Your gifts are not a trap. They can carry to unimagined heights…
September 13th, 2011 at 6:47 pm
I love the quick pace of this… ‘split hairs’ rocks.
September 13th, 2011 at 7:38 pm
Really nice, the circle is always one of the best symbols to keep handy in one’s poetic tool kit and you used it extremely well. Thanks
September 13th, 2011 at 8:12 pm
I like what dark angel said – no escape, excellent write!
September 13th, 2011 at 8:38 pm
wow the dark angle and the words excellent write thank you
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/13/a-new-life-begins/
September 13th, 2011 at 9:26 pm
Nice & the truth.
September 13th, 2011 at 9:35 pm
I enjoyed this piece as the truth is we will always fall short..
September 14th, 2011 at 9:40 am
Great concept and great execution.
September 14th, 2011 at 12:43 pm
Great poem! we always fail to hit center.
September 14th, 2011 at 2:35 pm
No beginning, no end…all the same. On a merry go round at least one has the chance to grab for the brass ring…but that was not your point…is it all that hopeless. First we are told to think outside the box. But here there is no box and no escape. Point taken. Well done!
September 14th, 2011 at 3:10 pm
Why, how sweet of you to dedicate a poem to me. 😛 (I’m sure every reader feels that way. And that’s a powerful way to write.)
These are my favorite lines:
“rise above
the track
we are on
split hairs”
“but this
circumference
without corners
holds us in”
September 14th, 2011 at 7:28 pm
I do love your voice. This is excellent.
“fingertips
always falling
short
of center”
What a great way to say it 🙂
September 14th, 2011 at 8:34 pm
Perfect representation of the circular meanderings of life. Very nice, and the artwork gives it the right touch.
September 14th, 2011 at 8:57 pm
True, that circle is tough to break.
September 14th, 2011 at 10:18 pm
Beautiful words.
Anna :o]
September 15th, 2011 at 11:01 am
Limitations are always with us…and sometimes we make our own, but this poem deals well with the frustrations; “split hairs and make deals” indeed.
September 15th, 2011 at 11:56 am
It’s the circle of life. wonderful, not mediocre at all.
September 17th, 2011 at 7:51 pm
I like the way it devolves down to that centre.